2017年12月16日 雅思写作范文解析

小作文

类型

折线图

题目

The graph below shows the percentage of GDP government spending on health, education and road ＆railways from 2000 to 2025 in a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

范文解析

本次小作文是一个动态的线图。注意主要信息点总体趋势，极值和数据的对比。

高分表达（范文中已用红色标注）

How much a particular government did and will

这个政府花了多少在。。。。

Albeit to varying degrees

尽管程度不同

To be more specific

具体来说

The least funded public service

资助最好的公共服务（同位语结构）

The ...period witnessed ...

某一段时间见证...趋势

范文

The line graph compares how much a particular government did and will provide financial aid to health, education and road as well as railways within the 2000-2025 period. In 2000, this government allocated a similar amount of GDP on all of the, but since then the allocations varied, albeit to varying degrees.

The majority of GDP was spent on education before 2015 or so when its figure was equal with that of health, constituting approximately 6%. To more specific, exactly 5% GDP funded education and with the peak at up to around 7%，it enjoyed a slight growth before falling slowly until 2025 when it is estimated to hit a low at 4.2%.

There was a stable rise of no less than 7% in health by the yea 2025 and in the same year, it is predicted that the proportion of GDP expenditure on it will reach the peak at as much as nearly 7%.

With an initial drop of only 1%, road and railways, the least funded public service, saw a gradual increase to almost 5% in 2016 while the last decade will witness another marginal reduction to 3.8%.

Overall, the government sponsored slightly more on education and health than on road and railway before about 2015 but during the next decade, health will receive a little bit more financial aid.

范文来自牛学邢睿赢老师

字数

200 words

大作文

类型

社会媒体类

题目

Many people believe that social networking sites (Facebook) have had a negative impact on individuals and society.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

范文解析

本题讨论社交网站是否给个体和整个社会造成负面影响。题目类型是议论文的一种观点类是To what extant do you agree or disagree类型，可以采用双边讨论，也就是5段式作文。特别需要注意的是，题目中需要讨论的是社交网站对个体和社会的影响，所以主体段论证需要回应对这两个对象的影响。

其实本题的本质是在变相考察网络的利弊分析。

文章结构

P1：引入话题+表明观点（不同意）

P2：承认社交网站的劣势：会给人们和社会的健康带来不利影响。

P3：承认社交网站的优势之一：社交网站会扩大人们的学习机会。

P4：进一步指出：社交网站还可以促进人们参与一些公共活动。

P5:总结（总结分论点+重申观点）

高分话题表达（范文中已用红色标注）

Take a heavy toll

对。。。有负面影响

Bully

欺负

Harass

骚扰

Empower ...to do sth

使能够（enable的同义词）

Undesirable

不利的

Facilitator

协调者， 促成者

Be confined to

局限于

Expertise

专业知识；专业技能

More often than not

常常

effective and efficient

高效的（押头韵）

Rules and regulations

规章制度（押头韵）

Detrimental

有害的

As long as

只要

高分结构（范文中已用蓝色标注）

So popular are social networking sites ,like Facebook and Twitter that

社交网站是如此的流行以至于（so...thata倒装结构）

take a heavy toll on a and on b .

对。。和对。。有负面影响（介词的平行）

an undesirable consequence that...

概括性同位语

a place where...

定语从句

On whether..or not

宾语从句

Never could these problems be resolved by money alone.

不能只依靠钱来解决。 倒装结构

范文

So popular are social networking sites ,like Facebook and Twitter, that almost every single individual in today’s society are engaging on a daily basis with them via a computer or mobile phones. However, despite the potential risks they pose,they does exert more beneficial effects on individuals and society as a whole.

The access to SNS seems to take a heavy toll on the health of people and on the well-being of society. A case in point is that many, minor and celebrities in particular, are easily bullied or harassed by hurtful and threatening messages posted or by the unflattering picture of a person spreading on these social network sites. Once becoming a target of cyber bullying, not only are those victims more likely to suffer anxiety, depression and even suicide , but this also further does harm to their life, work or study. What is worse, such will also lead to conflicts in real life, sometimes even crimes, an undesirable consequence that further detrimentally affects way more people as well as communities and thus significantly reduce social cohesion.

The exposure to these social network sites on the other hand is a facilitator in extending opportunities of formal learning for different people regardless of geographical location, cultural background and age. Compared with traditional education that learners have to be confined to a specific physical room, learning through SNS empowers them to interact with each other on a even larger scale, sharing information about their culture and work collaboratively and this is an significant way for them to acquire knowledge and therefore to broaden their horizon and networks. For adults, SNS, like Facebook and Skype, is also a useful, indispensable tool for workplace learning thanks to its regular accessibility through which employees could improve their expertise in a flexible way.

The social network site more often than not could function as an effective and efficient social media to promote civic engagement. For one thing, an increasing number of both governments and international organizations take advantage of its fast-spreading nature to advertise and to share public information and new rules and regulations to raise the public’s awareness of a particular field, such as public health and political activities. For another, the social network site is also a place where governments or policy makers could gather some information and ideas on whether a new policy should be implemented from netizens from different backgrounds to help them to make a wise decision.

In conclusion, healthily detrimental as social network sites appear to be, they do benefit the general public and the whole society educationally and civically and as long as the Internet and media literacy is popularised, these benefits could be maximised.

范文来自牛学邢睿赢老师

字数

330 words